A bigger love

Deborah studied his face. His eyes hadn’t changed: that direct, disarming gaze. His unruly curls, the slightly protruding ears he used to be so self-conscious about – she saw all this and she saw her Anthony.  He was still there. Her resolve faltered.

Then he shifted in his chair. His immensity of flesh quivered as he repositioned himself. His breaunidentifiable-on-a-stickth wheezed as he struggled for comfort, and the snack-box on his lap spilled its contents onto the floor.

‘I’ve had enough,’ she whispered. ‘You promised.’ She pressed her heel onto a greasy skewered something, flattening it, then she walked away.

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This is for Friday Fictioneers, a weekly 100 word writing challenge based on a picture. Thanks to Rochelle for hosting, and thanks to Kent Bonham for this week’s intriguing photo.

I took a sombre tone this week. For some information about this huge ‘first-world’ problem, you might like to read here.

http://www.who.int/features/factfiles/obesity/en/

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12 thoughts on “A bigger love

    • Dear Rochelle,
      Having just fasted for a day in preparation for a minor medical procedure, I can absolutely not recommend it. I’m happy you liked the description. Or maybe didn’t like it – that’s probably more appropriate.
      Cheers
      Marg

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  1. Dear Margirene,

    The greasy skewered something could be a direct quote from The Fan Man by William Kotzwinkle. Very good story about a moment of decision I would not wish on anyone. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  2. Dear Doug,
    I hadn’t heard of that story, but I did quickly google it when I read your comment. I shall investigate further. Yes, Deborah has made a tough decision – I suspect she’s been on the brink many times before. Having a loved one with any kind of addiction, including food, is just a horrible situation, with no easy solutions. Thank you for your feedback.
    Cheers
    Marg

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  3. She’s in an awkward situation, but at the end of the day she needs to look to her own happiness.

    I love the way you chose to integrate the mysterious object in this week’s prompt into your story – a “greasy skewered something” – very good!

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    • She’s in a bad place alright. I wanted to show her conflicting impulses – she loves him, but the choice to do something about their predicament is his alone. I’m very happy you liked my use of the prompt. It was a challenge this week. Thank you for reading and commenting.
      Marg

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    • That’s good. It’s not so easy to get the right balance of scene-setting and narrative in just a few words. I’m enjoying the discipline of trying to get it right in these 100 word stories.
      Cheers
      Marg

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  4. I especially liked this line: “the slightly protruding ears he used to be so self-conscious about” – it’s such a deft way of highlighting the changes in the man’s character since Deborah first fell for him, because any self-consciousness about his appearance clearly left long ago.

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