Hubert cruised the deserted streets. He should have given up, but he’d promised himself just one more.
Copyright – David Stewart
In the pre-dawn light he spotted her. She looked needy – lightly clad for the chilly morning, and alone. He slowed to a stop, spoke friendly words.
She was in. He took off, wasting no time. His mirror showed her face, tired, and anxious. He felt a stab of terrible hunger and knew it would soon be satisfied.
This was it – Hubert pulled over. The house was isolated, neglected, its gate askew, its garden overgrown.
“That’s $25, Miss.”
Done. Now, home for breakfast.
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This is for Friday Fictioneers. Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting the weekly flash fiction challenge, and thanks to David Stewart for this week’s prompt.
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You successfully led me down the wrong path! Brilliant
Rosey Pinkerton’s blog
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Thank you, Rosey. I’m glad you were surprised.
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Whew, I was really relieved to get THAT twist ending! You had me in suspense right up to the end.
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Well that’s good. I’m glad it kept you guessing. Thank you for commenting.
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it was a great twist. i didn’t expect it would end that way. good job. 🙂
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Thank you, Plaridel. I’m happy it worked.
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Was that an Uber ride?? Good suspense. 🙂
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No, just a regular taxi. Glad you liked the suspense. Thanks for commenting.
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Dear Margaret,
Just when I was sure she was going to be breakfast. Nicely played.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I think she’s had a tough enough night already without having to go through that. Thanks, Rochelle.
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Great twist at the end. Not at all what I was expecting but have to say I was happily relieved.
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Thank you, Irene. Glad you were surprised. She could have been heading for a very gruesome fate.
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Thank you for the twist. I like it.
Tracey
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I’m so glad. Thank you, Tracey for the feedback.
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Great twist, made me smile (and sigh in relief!). I was thinking “cannibal” at one point 🙂
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Yes, “cannibal” is one possibility I wanted you to consider. So I’m glad it occurred to you, and I’m happy the ending gave you a smile. Thanks for your comment.
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Very clever! Did she tip him?
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I don’t think she would have. She doesn’t seem like the generous type to me. Thanks for the nice comment.
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That one made me laugh out loud. Great twist!
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That’s good. I’m glad you liked it. Thank you for the read and comment.
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I was thinking that here was another vampire story. Great twist at the end there and the suggestive buildup to that end. Nicely done.
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No vampires in this neighbourhood. They’re all too nervous to wander these streets. All sorts of weird things happen here. I’m glad the build-up led you astray – and the ending worked. Thanks for your encouragement.
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I feel well and truly conned, hook, line and sinker.
Good piece.
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Fantastic! Just what I wanted. Thank you for the feedback, Mick.
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Nice bit of misdirection there. Well done.
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Thanks, Sandra. I wanted to lead people down the garden path a little way. Glad you liked it.
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Grinning here, after I was about to bite my nails. This is a twist I like very much.
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Great. Nail-biting then a grin is the perfect reaction. I’m happy with that. Thank you for the feedback.
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Like others, the twist was indeed a twist, but the melancholy tone carried this one Margaret. Nicely done!
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Thank you so much, Dawn. I appreciate your insight, and your encouraging comment.
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Whew! I thought he might be a vampire. Very clever, Margaret. Now when I read it again, I see the clues. Nicely done.
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Not a vampire, but he does have some worrying tendencies. Usually he’s harmless, as long as he gets his regular meal breaks. He’s an animal once he gets hungry. Actually, I know quite a few males like that. Glad you liked my story, Amy. Thanks for the lovely feedback.
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Oh my! clever write…I love surprise endings!
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I’m glad you were surprised, Oliana. Thank you for your lovely comment.
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Great twist at the end, Marg. Poor woman. Sounds like it was a rough night. Good story and well written. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thank you, Suzanne. I’m glad you liked the twist.
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Great story. Loved the way you built up tension and then surprised us at the end!
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Thank you, Joy. I’m glad you liked it.
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