At the end
Shivering, she stands ready – so young, but her eyes fixed on her goal. Then a signal and she’s off.
I’m in the next lane. I’ve finished my lap and linger to catch my breath and watch.
“Hi,” I greet her as she surfaces. “You did well.”
“It was my first time to do the whole length,” she pants.
I smile encouragement then struggle out, ignoring the disapproval on my grandson’s face as he helps me into my chair and hands me my oxygen mask.
“I know,” I pacify him, gasping now. “I just needed to do it one last time.”
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This is my contribution to Friday Fictioneers, a weekly flash fiction link-up hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Thanks to Rochelle for this week’s photo prompt, as well.
Some things just have to be done, against all wise advice
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They do indeed. Thanks for reading, Neil.
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I liked this, Margaret. It was a sweet moment!
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Thanks, Dale.
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Oh, that was lovely. Who can blame her for needing to swim one last time?
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Glad you liked it, Susan. It’s hard when poor health forces you to give up something you love.
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ouch! 🙂
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Yes. Thanks for reading plaridel.
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full circle, skillfully constructed. poignant story
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Thanks, Jade, especially for your comment about the structure. I think it’s so important, and tricky, in these tiny stories.
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You are welcome. I agree, there is definitely a knack to it.
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It’s probably kept her going all these years so why not once more?
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Exactly. Thanks for reading, Ali.
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A true competitor.
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Thanks, Violet.
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Even though he disapproved, the grandson facilitated her desire to do what she loved just one more time. I love it.
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Thank you for your encouraging comment, Linda. Such a grandson would be a rare treasure, I think.
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Go grandpa!
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Determined till the end. Grandpa or Grandma??? Doesn’t really matter. Thanks for reading, Dawn.
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What a good grandson to help her have one last lap and give her time to encourage a young one. Lovely story!
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He’s a rare one, I suspect. Thanks, Brenda. Glad you enjoyed.
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A shared passion across generations… what a special moment together. Your story flowed very nicely.
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Thank you Magarisa. As you say, it’s wonderful when different generations can connect in some way.
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You’re welcome, Margaret.
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I love how she could give her blessing to the young swimmer… so sad that she cannot swim again.
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I’m sure she was remembering her own first lap of the pool as she watched the little girl. Thanks for reading, Bjorn.
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Dear Margaret,
I can think of few things worse than no longer being able to swim. I’m with Grandma. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you, Rochelle. I thought you might relate to this story. It would be hard to be forced to give up something you love.
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I like how you covered both ends of the spectrum, a beginner and one at the end of the line. The Alpha and Omega, if you will.
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Thank you, Russell. So glad you liked that aspect of my story. In fact, I considered calling it Alpha and Omega.
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Good for him, after all what’s the point if we give up on the things we enjoy?
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This swimmer is refusing to give up until there’s no more choice about it. Thanks for commenting, Iain.
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A lovely story, Margaret with a great contrast between the elderly woman taking her last lap of the complete pool and the young girl completing her first. 🙂 — Suzanne
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That was very moving, Margaret.
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Oh lovely. I really liked this. She’s happy and that’s good if a little naughty
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