a 99 word story for Carrot Ranch weekly challenge, hosted by Charli Mills.

View from the top
“It doesn’t get better than this,” he says, pulling me close. I feel the heat of him. The valley below is a green tangle, the distant ridge shadow-rippled.
“Glorious,” I reply.
Returning to camp, he smiles encouragement.
“I knew you’d love it,” he says.
We pack up before dark, stowing the gear into zippered bags. His back is sweat-sheened, his body taut as he works. In gathering dusk, nightjars call. Mating songs.
My skin is aflame with insect bites, bruised and blistered.
I take a long, last look, drink him in, then pull the final zipper shut.
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The prompt for this story:
In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about zippers. What are the zippers for? What challenges do they present to the story? Go where the prompt leads!
What great tension you build in 99-words, using that final zip as a closing. Great craft writing! Your submission will be in the Zippers Collection and will publish on February 23.
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I’m delighted. Thank you, Charli. I’m looking forward to contributing more stories to Carrot Ranch.
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This sucked me in. Beautiful to visualise with the placement of your words.
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Thank you, Ellen. I’m glad you enjoyed the imagery in this.
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Sounds like an exciting camping trip…
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It was – up to a point.
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